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The diagram gives information about the vegetation distribution of two different types of mountain, namely tropical and temperate mountains.

The diagram gives information about the vegetation distribution of two different types of mountain, namely tropical and temperate mountains.
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The diagram gives information about the vegetation distribution of two different types of
mountain
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mountains
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, namely tropical and temperate
mountains
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, it is evident that tropical
mountains
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 are dramatically higher than temperate
mountains
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. Another striking feature is that tropical
mountains
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 have a wider range of temperature zones. Regarding the tropical
mountains
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, they are measured to be 5,500
meters
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 high and divided into six areas. The lowest layer is the warm zone where tropical crops are cultivated at an altitude of 520
meters
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coffee and cocos are planted in temperate zones, with a height of 1,300
meters
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. The upper area is the cool zone which is suitable to grow grain and is about 1,200
meters
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 high.On
the
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top of that, the limit for broad-leaf trees is at an altitude of 800
meters
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. Alpine meadows for pines and firs and the permanent snow layer are on the top of these
mountains
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, with a height of 1,700
meters
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. Turning to the second type of mountain,
they
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consist of four layers and have a height of 12,000
feets
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 ( about 3,700
meters
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).
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the cool zone, with an altitude of 1,500
meters
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, is used for grains, potatoes and falx plantations.
Forest
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The forest
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 is suitable for broad-leaf trees
while
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 spruces are possible to be planted in alpine meadows, about 300 and 1,000
meters
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 high respectively. The top area, which is covered by snow
year round
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year-round
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, has a snow line of 700
meters
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words mountains, meters with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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