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Some people think we should keep all the money we earn and not pay taxes to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many
people
 believe that
people
 shouldn’t have to pay
taxes
 to the
government
, and
they
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that they
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 can save
their
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money
. I completely disagree with
this
 statement because I think it is a big source of
money
 for the
government
 for construction and maintenance.
Due to
 the high cost of construction and maintenance of buildings and infrastructures,
taxes
 are a good source of revenue for managing expenditures. On the one hand, normally the population of a country is increased. Because of the growing population, the
government
 should provide places for living.
For instance
, the
government
 has to construct roads, build schools, parks, and houses for
people
 in intact areas to make a place for living. So, the
money
 that comes from
taxes
 is very useful.
On the other hand
, except for new constructions, old buildings and infrastructures need to be maintained by the
government
.
For example
, in public transportation after some years of using buses, taxis, and trains they need to be renewed or maintained because they may lose their efficiency and functions and terrible accidents might happen.
Moreover
, they need to be expanded as well. In conclusion, some
people
 say individuals should save their
money
 and not pay
taxes
 to the
government
. In my point of
view
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taxes
 are an important source of
money
 because the state has spent lots of
money
 on the construction and maintenance.
Therefore
, I completely disagree, and individuals should pay their shares as
taxes
.
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