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Life nowadays is generally much more stressful than in the past. Give some reasons why people suffer more from stress nowadays, and say what they can do to reduce it.

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In the contemporary era, the
internet
 has reached an advanced level and
people
 are connected with each other across the globe for their business or personal relations.
Hence
 life has become more stressful than in the
last
 few decades. The essay will discuss the cause of
this
 unbalanced and stressful
lifestyle
 and possible solutions to overcome
this
 concerning issue. To commence with, globalization and the
Internet
 are the major reasons behind
this
 busy
lifestyle
.
In other words
, after globalization companies have expanded their work areas to other countries and their local citizens take huge pressure to perform better at their workplaces by ignoring their personal and health requirements.
For example
, as per a WHO survey, 70% of working professionals postpone healthcare visits because of their unmanaged work timings. Earlier luxury was limited to certain
people
 and they had it accepted, they can not have a dream to own it. But now it is easily accessible because of the
internet
, so everyone is putting extra effort to earn money and attain that luxurious
lifestyle
.
On the other hand
,
people
 should prioritize their health
instead
 of their professional career. They should add some physical activities to keep their mind stress free which eventually helps them to perform better in their professional area.
Furthermore
, they should spend some quality time with their families and friends to break their monotonous work cycle.
Secondly
,
people
 should understand their financial limits for purchasing and living a certain
lifestyle
. They should prefer to be debt free
instead
 of owing luxury items with loans.
For Instance
, one of my friends has become a bankrupt person because of the continuous failure of the loan EMI, and he took all these loans for their luxurious
lifestyle
 like exotic vacations, and premium shopping to name a few.
To conclude
, globalization and the
internet
 somewhere forcing individuals to live a life with stress.
whereas
 they can avoid and save themselves by understanding the actual need for a profession and ignoring the rat race to attain the luxury in their lives. They should definitely add physical exercise to their daily routine to be in a state of peace
instead
 of stress.
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