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The chart below shows the number of apps that were sold in three different stores from 2010 to 2014.

The chart below shows the number of apps that were sold in three different stores from 2010 to 2014.
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The bar chart illustrates how many mobile applications were purchased in the
iOS
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,
Google
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 Play and Amazon Appstore between 2010 and 2014.
Overall
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, the most striking feature is that the total
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 increased considerably in every
store
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 over the period,
however
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while
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 in 2010 the
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 was the most popular one, it was overtaken by
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 Play in 2014.
In contrast
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, Amazon Appstore remained the least popular, despite a significant rise over time. In 2010, the
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 dominated the market, with just over 150,000
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 being purchased,
whereas
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 the
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 bought in
Google
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 Play was well below 50,000.
However
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, even with the
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Store
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 growing steadily every year and amounting to roughly 250,000 in 2011 and 450,000 in 2012,
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 Play saw a much more dramatic increase, doubling in 2011 and tripling in 2012, which amounted to just over 300,000
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 sold.
Furthermore
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, the
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 purchased in the
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Store
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, which stood at approximately 750,000 in 2013 and was just slightly over the
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 of
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 sold in
Google
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 Play, had soared to 1,200,000 by 2014, with
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 Play overtaking it and amounting to 1,350,000 the same year. Amazon Appstore, which stood at roughly 0 in 2010, had the least
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 of
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 sold over time.
Nonetheless
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, each year it rose steadily and had amounted to just under 300,000 by 2014, which was the same level as the
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 in 2011 and
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 Play in 2012.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words ios, app, store, google, number, apps with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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