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It is thought by some that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is better in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#city #life #countryside
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In
this
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 modern society, it is a common belief that living in a metropolitan area is more convenient
while
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 others argue that the best
life
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 is in the countryside. In my point of view, I consider that the outskirts are the greatest place to live in. On the one hand, living in
the
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 small town reduces the risk of suffering from some
health
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 problems. It means that since the countryside
do
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does
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 not have any industrial zone and not many petrol means of transport are used , the amount of
cacbon
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carbon
 dioxide discharged into the environment is less than in the
city
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 so that the atmosphere here is much fresher.
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,
people
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 from rural
area
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 would not contract any breathing diseases. Research from Bach Khoa University in Vietnam has shown that
people
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 who live in
the
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 non-
city
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 environment tend to have
longer
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life
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 than citizens.
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, everyone can get a cheaper price for everything they buy in the countryside.
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 the fact that a large number of food and pieces of stuff here are hand-made and not imported from other countries,
people
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 can have loads of good quality groceries at half or even three times lower prices than in the
city
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.
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,
people
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 can save their money and protect their
health
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while
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 living
in
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 the outskirts.
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, some are in the idea that
city
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life
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 is more convenient since it
applys
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applies
apply
 ay common needs in
dily
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daily
life
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.
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, residents can easily move everywhere at every time they want with the help of taxis, grab, or some types of public transport.
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there are thousands of options for
people
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 to enjoy because entertainment places
are appear
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 in every corner of the urban. To illustrate
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, families can spend their time
toghether
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together
 in the cinema or a dated couple can eat out
toghether
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together
 in a romantic restaurant and go shopping at the mall. One another benefit of
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 big
city
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 is that it provides many job
oppotunities
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opportunities
 for residents from investors, entrepreneurs, and factories. To take a clear example, a student can easily get a part-time job in every company in his field to earn a living and gain more experience for future work. All in all, big cities are the best choice for one’s personal and career development.
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, I strongly believe that rural
life
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 is better.
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 saving
people
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’s budget and improving their physical
health
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, villagers can get a happier
life
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 there with a peaceful atmosphere and helpful
neighborhoods
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neighbourhoods
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, escape from stressful busy
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, and heal themselves. In conclusion,
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 both village and
city
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 have their own advantages, I still prefer
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life
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 in the small town appears to have more
health
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 and economic benefits.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • metropolitan
  • infrastructure
  • cosmopolitan
  • commute
  • sociocultural
  • prosperity
  • sustainability
  • rural
  • tranquility
  • urbanization
  • relocation
  • residential
  • populace
  • ecological footprint
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