The graph shows the annual income of languages-related jobs in US dollars in five cities.

The graph shows the annual income of languages-related jobs in US dollars in five cities.
The bar graph compares the annual
income
of three different jobs that are related to languages.
Overall
, the highest
income
is for
interpreters
in Toronto and Munich,
while
in Paris
this
job shares its maximum
income
with
translators
.
Besides
this
,
interpreters
and language
teachers
represent the highest incomes in Dubai.
In contrast
, these three professions are equally paid in Mexico, representing the lowest rates.
To begin
with, Toronto has the highest figure related to
interpreters
, getting paid $80000 annually.
On the other hand
,
translators
and language
teachers
share the same
income
in
this
city being just over $60000.
In addition
to
this
, in Munich the interpreter is
also
better paid, receiving over $70000 every year, followed by
translators
, who earn over $60000.
Finally
, the lowest salary is for
teachers
, with an
income
of $60000.
Furthermore
, in Paris
interpreters
and
translators
have the same
income
of just over $60000,
whereas
teachers
earn above $40000. Regarding Dubai,
interpreters
and
teachers
share the same
income
of $60000 per year,
while
translators
earn $50000.
Finally
, Mexico has the lowest rates in every profession, being all three language-related jobs
similarly
paid with an annual
income
of just under $20000.
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