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The chart shows the number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in selected countries. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given.

The chart shows the number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in selected countries. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given.
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The bar chart illustrates, among 100 population how many are using mobile
phones
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 and
landlines
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 in Canada, the US, Germany,
Denmark
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, the
UK
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,
Sweden
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 and Italy.
Overall
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, Mobile
phones
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 are highly used in Italy,
Sweden
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 and the
UK
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 compared to other countries. The
usage
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 of
Landlines
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 is more in
Denmark
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. In Mobile
phones
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 Italy,
Sweden
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,
UK
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 and
Denmark
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 have a similar number of
people
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 using between 80 to 90. Germany
also
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 has an appreciatable
usage
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 of pocket computers as 70.
Whereas
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 the US and Canada's utilization of cell
phones
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 is the least compared to other countries, which is below 50. In regard to
Landlines
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,
Denmark
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 has the maximum
usage
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 by
people
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, with a number of approximately 89 and Countries like Canada, the US and
Sweden
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 have alike figures of
people
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 count with 63, 67 and 67.
Likewise
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, Germany and
UK
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 have a close
value
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 of 60 and 58. Though Italy has the highest number of
people
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usage
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 of mobile
phones
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, their use of
landlines
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 was 50 out of 100
people
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words phones, landlines, denmark, uk, sweden, usage, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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