IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 7.5

Some people believe that it is ok to put the needs of humans over environmental concerns. While others feel that protecting the environment should be priortized. Discuss both views.

#people #ok #humans #concerns #environment
The importance of preserving the environment which was always debatable has now become more controversial with many people claiming that it is beneficial
while
 others reject
this
 notion as they are more comfortable prioritizing their own needs above nature.
This
 essay will compare and contrast both opinions and will be discussed a suitable conclusion. Initiating with the points supporting the first school of thought, some people believe that deprioritizing the environment is all right if that suffices basic human needs
such
 as land and electricity. To explicate, in
this
 period of modernity, infrastructural development needs trees to be cut and to travel places, resources like fuel and oil are needed. To cite an example, many villages in India were deprived of electricity and good internet connection as people opposed construction and deforestation earlier. On the contrasting side, the community who held another viewpoint said that maintaining the natural balance is indispensable. There is no denying the fact that nowadays, crowds get overboard with their requirements
due to
 which nature suffers. As of today, it has become more than a necessity to save the environment for our upcoming generations. To cite an example, excessive usage of plastic ended up polluting oceans and several sea creatures have extinct because of the same.
To conclude
, it will depend upon the mindsets of the crowd which view they are in favour of whether they would like to put their needs first or preserve the globe, whatsoever may be the situation an environmental balance needs to be maintained.
Submitted by jyotiarora940 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: