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Motorways help people travel quickly and cover long distance but they also cause problems. What are the problems of motorways and what solutions are there?

#motorways #people #travel #distance
Certainly
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 motorways helped humanity to travel long
distance
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 by that saved their time, but
it
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also
 brought a lot of problems,
such
 as traffic jams, pollution etc. It will be described underneath in
this
 essay. In my opinion, the first biggest problem is crowded roads by
car
. I noticed that in our country there are a lot of traffic jams during
school
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 year. I guess that the main cause of
this
 is that young people use
car
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the car
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 to get to school or university because they do not want to be late and think about their personal comfort. The reason
of
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 their choice is understandable since we have
bad
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 public
transport
 system in Uzbekistan. Buses do not come at the time, go very slowly, and they are too crowded
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 people.
Therefore
, I think, if we reform the lack of public
transport
, we can reduce
number
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 of young
car
 users which will lead reduction
of
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 traffic jams. The second problem of motorways is pollution. Unfortunately,
due to
 them,
number
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a number
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 of
cars
 and lorries is getting
more
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more
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 on the road. By rising
cars
, 
car
 exhaust increase and they pollute the cities, which
affect
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at the end
 on the health of people.
Thus
, it is necessary to decrease
transport
. We need to call society to it. As
it
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was told before, well organized public
transport
 will be
good
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a good
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 solution to decrease
quantity
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the quantity
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 of
cars
. Creating
infrastructure
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the infrastructure
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 to use bicycles could help to solve
this
 problem.
Also
, if we use
cars
, the good solution will be to find familiars who go
to
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 the same direction as we are and get to work together. In that case, we can reduce of usage of
transport
.
To conclude
, I think that by reforming public
transport
, creating comfortable infrastructure for using bicycles could help to solve
problems
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 of motorways.
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