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Some people believe that sport is an essential part of school life for children, while others feel like it should be purely optional.Discuss both these opposing views and give your opinion

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It is argued that the kids in school have become so reliant on
computers
 for their day-to-day study needs and the use of
computers
 should be avoided by the
teachers
 as much as possible. I completely disagree with
this
 statement and believe that technology has enriched education and that
computers
 should be used as a medium for teaching. In
this
 ,essay I will discuss why
computers
 are vital for today's academics. To commence with, There are numerous benefits of using
computers
 as part of the study.
Firstly
, it is very helpful for the environment because ,with the introduction of ,
computers
 the dependency on books and copies has declined drastically.
Moreover
, it is
also
 economical, now
students
 don't need to spend so much money on buying copies or books because they can
access
 books online or write assignments on the
computers
.
Furthermore
,
computers
 are
also
 playing a significant role in assisting
students
 who are falling behind, since
teachers
 can not pay attention to all the
students
 equally,
students
 can be helped in solving concepts which are missed during the classes.
Computers
 are having
access
 to the internet which is a blessing to both
students
as well as
teachers
,
for instance
: during the COVID times
students
 were able to cope with their studies and
teachers
 had
access
 to their job. Based on the aforementioned reasons, I believe having
access
 to the
computers
 in the classrooms is the need of an hour, despite the fact that it has some disadvantages to using
computers
 and laptops.
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