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Band 6.5

Some people think it is more important to plant more trees in open areas in towns and cities than provide more housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some individuals believe it is more necessary to reforestation in open
spaces
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 in rural and urban
areas
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 than
offers
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offer
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 more homes. I totally agree with
this
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 statement because
plantting
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planting
 more
trees
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 in open places in agricultural
areas
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 and
citises
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cities
 is
environmentally-friendly
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environmentally friendly
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,
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apply
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 and can encourage
people
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 to adopt
active
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an active
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lifesyle
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lifestyle
lifestyles
,and
also
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ehance
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enhance
 the
economic
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economy
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 of countries.
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 with, there are several reasons why I believe the plant more
trees
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open
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in open
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areas
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 in
countryside
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the countryside
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 and urban
areas
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 is very extremely significant than
provide
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providing
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 accommodations.
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, reforestation in open
spaces
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 can contribute to
address
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addressing
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the
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apply
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environmental issues namely, pollution, climate change,
global
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and global
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 warming.
This
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 is because
trees
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 play a significant role to absorb the Co2 footprint from the atmosphere.
Consequently
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,
platting
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planting
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trees
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 in open
areas
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 in towns and cities can provide
healthy
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a healthy
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 environment for
people
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.
Secondly
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,
platting
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planting
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 more
trees
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 in open
areas
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 in rural and urban
areas
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 can motivate local
people
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 to adopt
healthy
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a healthy
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 lifestyle. To illustrate, more green
spaces
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 can incentivize
people
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 to
cycling
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cycle
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 and
doing
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do
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 exercise in their
neighboord
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neighbourhood
neighbours
neighbour
 or public places, which these step can contribute to
reduce
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reducing
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the
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apply
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serious diseases namely, cancer,obesity,
heart
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and heart
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 attack.
A
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 as result, more green
spaces
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 can assist to mitigate the pressure
in
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on
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healthcare
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the healthcare
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 system
as well as
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 save a considerable amount for the governments via prevent
people
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 to develop serious diseases.
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,
plantting
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planting
 more green
spaces
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 in open
areas
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 can
makes
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make
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 agricultural and urban
areas
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 more attractive for tourists.
Therefore
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, many tourists around the world will desire to visit these green places in order to enjoy and
relaxation
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, and
then
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 tourists will spend money
in
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on
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 hotels,
public
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and public
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 transport, which
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this
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apply
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can contribute to
boosts
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boosting
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 the economy of
country
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the country
a country
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.
To sum up
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, I strongly believe that more reforestation in open
areas
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 in towns and cities is very important than building more homes
,
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apply
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 because it can
helps
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help
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 to tackle
environmentals
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environmental
 issues, provide
healthy
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a healthy
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 environment for
people
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, and attract
tourism
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the tourism
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 industry.
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