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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. why is this the case what can be done about this problem?

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It has been noted that
besides
 the improvement in agricultural technology, most nations around the globe are affected by
hunger
. In
this
 ,essay I will discuss the reason and actions to be implemented for
this
 issue. There are many reasons to list but a few, war around the
world
 is one of many causes of famine despite farming advancements.
For instance
,
due to
 civil wars breaking out
people
 are bound to be affected by
hunger
 because all the farms will be destroyed and no one will work on the farm. So it does not matter whether there is advanced farming technology because workers run away
due to
 war.
Furthermore
, we realize that there is overpopulation on
this
 earth.
For example
, the census shows that
due to
 the increased number of births
people
 will need more
food
 and the shortage of
food
 will rise because the ratio of
people
 to
food
 does not tally.
This
 is why
hunger
 is affecting
people
 worldwide.
However
, there are measures that can be done to cater for
hunger
. There should be birth control the
world
 over, so that if governments are able to control the population it will be which means that
food
 produced will be enough for
people
. There should be donations from those countries with enough
food
 should offer those with
hunger
 in their countries.
Thus
, rich countries should consider supplying those without
food
. In conclusion,
hunger
 can not be wiped out completely but donations and controlling the
world
 population will be a great deal to eradicate
hunger
. Minimizing wars around the
world
 will play a vital role in limiting
hunger
.
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  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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