Some people think that the best way to broaden young people’s understanding of the world is to encourage them to travel to other countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What other measure do you think might be effective?

I strongly agree with the statement that the best way to broaden young people's understanding of the world is to encourage them to other countries. As young people will travel abroad homey they will learn new
stuff
which will help both homey and student life as well . As students will explore another
country
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that will be helpful to them. The future of
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is today's generation so as they will go to other countries will see new
stuff
, learn new
stuff
,
explore
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and explore
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. If today's generation will go to another
country
then
they will see new food, lifestyle, clothes, learning systems, education, place, heritage, rules and many more. If young
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present
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knowledge to other
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then
it means that they are presenting the
nation
. In
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country
there will be so
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stuff
that will be different from their own
nation
, as they will go there
then
they will learn new
stuff
which will even be helpful to their own
nation
. As they will travel solo
then
they will find so much difficulty which will help them to be strong and will show them really. From the about ,information it can be clearly said that by encouraging to travel in other
nation
to young people have lot many benefits.
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