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Some people think that the best way to broaden young people’s understanding of the world is to encourage them to travel to other countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What other measure do you think might be effective?

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I strongly agree with the statement that the best way to broaden young people's understanding of the world is to encourage them to other countries. As young people will travel abroad homey they will learn new
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 which will help both homey and student life as well . As students will explore another
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country
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that will be helpful to them. The future of
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nation
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a nation
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 is today's generation so as they will go to other countries will see new
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, learn new
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,
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and explore
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. If today's generation will go to another
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 they will see new food, lifestyle, clothes, learning systems, education, place, heritage, rules and many more. If young
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 knowledge to other
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nation
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 it means that they are presenting the
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. In
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another country
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country
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 there will be so
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stuff
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 that will be different from their own
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, as they will go there
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 they will learn new
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 which will even be helpful to their own
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 . As they will travel solo
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 they will find so much difficulty which will help them to be strong and will show them really. From the about ,information it can be clearly said that by encouraging to travel in other
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 to young people have lot many benefits.
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