The maps below show the development of a city in HCM in 1995 and now.

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The two given maps compare information about the improvement of a region in HCM in 1995 and now.

Overall

, the city has been developed sustainably from an agricultural

area

to become an entertainment

area

for tourists. Looking into details, it is apparent that in the north, the farmland has been transformed into a golf course, by now.

In addition

, all the trees in the forest park were chopped down and it has been replaced by a tennis court. Meanwhile, to the west of the farmland, some addition happened in the housing

area

in which are constructed several homes.

Furthermore

, to the south of

this

housing complex, the shop zone has been converted into restaurants and opposite the shop

area

, a new car park has been built next to the hotel. The fish market

area

that is

located in the south of the city has been demolished to make way for apartments and a new fishing port has been built on the sea.

In contrast

, the cafe is still in the coastline

area

and there is no conversion for that building.

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The maps below show the development of a city in HCM in 1995 and now.

Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones in communication has negative effects on young people's reading and writing skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Modern technology now allows rapid and uncontrolled access to information in many countries. This is a danger to our societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people buy local food?

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish