The maps below show the development of a city in HCM in 1995 and now.

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The two given maps compare information about the improvement of a region in HCM in 1995 and now.

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, the city has been developed sustainably from an agricultural

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to become an entertainment

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for tourists. Looking into details, it is apparent that in the north, the farmland has been transformed into a golf course, by now.

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, all the trees in the forest park were chopped down and it has been replaced by a tennis court. Meanwhile, to the west of the farmland, some addition happened in the housing

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in which are constructed several homes.

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, to the south of

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housing complex, the shop zone has been converted into restaurants and opposite the shop

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, a new car park has been built next to the hotel. The fish market

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that is

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located in the south of the city has been demolished to make way for apartments and a new fishing port has been built on the sea.

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, the cafe is still in the coastline

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and there is no conversion for that building.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

180 words

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The maps below show the development of a city in HCM in 1995 and now.

Some people think young people are not suitable for important position in the government while other people think it is a good idea for young people to take on the positions. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Overall, the widespread use of the internet has a mostly positive effect on life in today’s world.

Professionals such as doctors, nurses and teachers should be paid more than sports and entertainment personalities. To what extent do you agree?

Some people think that success is the best way to measure intelligence. Others believe that it can be measured through other useful parameters. Do you agree or disagree?

Very few schoolchildren learn about the value of money and how to look after it, yet this is a critical life skill that should be taught as part of the school curriculum. Do you agree or disagree?