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Your school has decided to save money by having the students do all of the cleaning tasks such as sweeping the halls and washing the windows rather than hiring a person to do them. Do you agree with this policy? Use specific reasons and examples to support your argument.

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My first reason is that
students
 can learn useful
skills
 beyond academics if they are required to clean the classrooms and buildings. Of course,
students
 will become better at dusting, sweeping, mopping, and other chores. Some children are not required to do these
tasks
 at home, so they can acquire these
skills
 at
school
. More importantly, they can learn another essential skill: teamwork. If
students
 have to clean their classroom, they should divide the task equitably. They must practice their social
skills
while
 sharing the responsibilities,
such
 as having some
students
 fill buckets of water
while
 others mop. By completing routine
tasks
 together,
students
 learn not just to clean but
also
 to interact efficiently as a group. My second reason for feeling that
students
 ought to do cleaning
tasks
 at
school
 is that they will take better care of the facilities. I will use my
school
 as an example. Because my classmates and I do not clean the rooms, we often drop pencil shavings and eraser fragments on the floor under our desks. If we had to sweep up the mess every day, I'm sure the situation would be different. We would throw away garbage and wipe up spills immediately rather than have a much larger mess to clean up later. We would
also
 take pains to avoid damage that we would have to repair. Ultimately, my classmates and I would take pride in our efforts. We could boast that we have the cleanest classroom in the
school
.
As a result
 of having to do the work by ourselves, we would keep the building cleaner and cause less damage. In conclusion, it is a great idea for kids to have to complete basic housework
tasks
 like sweeping and scrubbing sinks in their schools. I feel
this
 way because
students
 will gain valuable practical
skills
 and because they will take care of the facilities.
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