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The graph below gives information about how much people in the United States and the United Kingdom spend on petrol. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about how much people in the United States and the United Kingdom spend on petrol. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The Line graph describes the amount of petrol that
people
use
 in the United
States
 and the United
Kingdom
. From the
overall
 perspective,the richest in the United
States
spends
Correct subject-verb agreement
spend
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 the least
percent
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per cent
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 of
income
for
Change preposition
on
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fuel
while
 the poorest in the United
Kingdom
use
 the least
fuel
. In
United
Correct article usage
the United
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Kingdom
,
people
 who have
the
Correct article usage
apply
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low
Add a hyphen
low-income
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income
use
 from 0.5 of
income
 to over 2
percent
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per cent
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 of
income
.
However
,in the United
States
,about 4 or 5
percent
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per cent
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 of
income
 is used for
fuel
 among the poorest.For the
people
 who have middle
income
,in the United
States
,they
use
 less
fuel
 than the poor
people
 but in the United
Kingdom
,they
use
 more
fuel
. In the United
States
,the
use
 of
fuel
 decreases in the percentage of
income
 among the richest and it is between 2 and 4
percent
.
On the other hand
,in the United
Kingdom
,the more they
rich
Add a missing verb
are rich
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,the more they spend on
fuel
 and it is about 4
percent
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per cent
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 of their
income
 rate.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, use, states, kingdom, percent, income, fuel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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