The map below show the village of skoeford in 1930 and 2010

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1930 and 2010.

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, it can be seen that the rural area has a drastic change in the time 2010. The main developments of the suburb are retirement homes , schools and roadways. On the one hand, In the year ,1930 the area has lots of shops on the roadside and a post office near the road.

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, it has farmland in the southwest corner of the space .

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, in the 2010 ,period the farmland has been destroyed and they make the roadways better.

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, it renovated the roadways better in the Northwest corner of the town and removed the shops in 2010.

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, one of the main development is the primary schools in the village they extended the size of the buildings and added one new building.

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, the bridge remains unchanged and the gardens have been replaced by houses in the village.

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, the large house has been renovated as a retirement house and new buildings were extended there.

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, the population has increased and houses were built in every part of the rural field.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 8.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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4 paragraphs

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The map below show the village of skoeford in 1930 and 2010

Robot and artificial intelligence are being developed to replace humans in the workplace. why is this happening? do you think this will have a positive or negative impact on society?

In spite of advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

People who damage public property, such as buildings or statues should be required to do community service (such as cleaning parks) as a punishment rather than other forms of punishment (such as paying a fine or going to prison). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Interviews form the basic selection criteria for most large companies. However some people think that interview is not a reliable method of choosing whom to employ. To what extent do you agree or disagree?