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The pie chart shows the percentage of persons arrested in the five years ending 1994 and the bar chart shows the most recent reasons for arrest. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows the percentage of persons arrested in the five years ending 1994 and the bar chart shows the most recent reasons for arrest. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie
chart
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 gives information on the ratio of defendants in 2 sexes over a period of 5 years ending in 1994
while
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 the bar
chart
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 provides a comparison of the reasons for the most recent arrest.
Overall
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, the major people committing crimes were almost men,
whereas
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 the
females
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 were arrested mostly in public drinking, which experienced the biggest ratio of recent
cases
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.
Additionally
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, the figures for males arrested were higher than that for
females
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 in almost factors. It is noticeable that the proportion of men arrested was over three times as big as women ones, specifically 32% for the males and 9% for the
females
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.
Moreover
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,
according to
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 the bar
chart
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, three main reasons for both sexes were assault, public drinking and other reason. To be precise, those
cases
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 all witnessed over 15% and the public drinking
cases
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 hit the highest point in the
chart
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 at approximately 37% of the
females
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. Looking at the
chart
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 for more details, no answer
cases
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 of men and women arrested both hit the lowest points at around 7% and 4% respectively.
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, the statistics for female defendants were nearly the same at around 13% for two reasons: breach of order and theft.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, females, cases with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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