Some people say that the experiences a child has before starting school have the most influence on their future life. Others say that experiences as a teenager, especially at school are more influential. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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childhood memories play a significant role in the future of every person,
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there are individuals who assume that the most important
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are gained during the
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of adolescence . I will discuss both sides and provide my own ideas in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, the most essential
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are made until the individual reaches the age of 7. From the beginning of their
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people learn how to walk or eat.
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, the individuals tend to socialize, make new friends and communicate with each other.
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, the basics
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as writing and reading are taught by either teachers or parents throughout the childhood
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, the more academic
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of life is between 7 and 17 years old. At
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time, humans face the real world and earn extremely influential and essential
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. During the school years, the youth adopts to the community, by being more competitive and open-minded.
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, individuals face difficulties and ought to overcome them, by making decisions and mistakes, which gives them an opportunity to develop and prepare themselves for adulthood.
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, there might be some bad
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, need to fight with someone and probably get hurt.
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, many people have vivid memories and bright, warm feelings about their adolescence.
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, my brother once fell in love with a beautiful girl from his class,
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she became his wife. In conclusion,
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the
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of being a teenager is the root of our future,
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the “kindergarten years”
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play a vital role in the development of people.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • influence
  • future life
  • experiences
  • childhood development
  • bonding
  • socialization
  • peer interactions
  • basic skills
  • education
  • learning
  • friendships
  • independence
  • identity
  • exposure
  • new ideas
  • perspectives
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