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Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media for communicating information. State which you consider to be the most effective. • comics • books • radio • television • film • theatre

#three #media #information #comics #books #radio #television #film #theatre
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 of previews advantages and disadvantages. So, in
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 I am going to discuss both the aforementioned aspects of Comics,
Books
, and Television as addressing
information
. And I will shed light on the most efficacious one.
Firstly
, let's discuss the pros and cons of Comics as
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 resource. In Comedy people transfers the present or past
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 experiences in a funny
way
 So, that they can convey their content by making people laugh. it is effective in kids learning As
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 they learn more
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funny
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 and childish
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 in their early learning period.
Moreover
, they are
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a source
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 of
Information
 with entertainment, they
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 our time
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qualified
 and informative.
Sheding
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Shedding
 light on drawbacks, Comics are sometimes conveying the CORRECT ARTICLE USAGE apply It seems that there is an article usage problem here. show examples material which criticises others and
not
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 relatively
infirmative
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informative
 all the time.
secondly
, talking about
Books
, they are obviously a great
source
 of
information
 in all ways.
Books
 are fully loaded about
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 of
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 and
acient
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ancient
 times and the basics which are needed to learn the
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 of life.
Also
, to learn about the
specifc
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specific
 field in life or any occupation. Mainly,
Books
 are the
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all over the world at any place for learning. Discussing flaws, there are not any heavy flaws but, only that there should be some digital innovation in
Books
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its
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 the demand of today's high technological world. Another aspect,
that is
 Television is
also
the
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 forbidden
source
 of
information
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 they update us with the latest news that what's happening and where it's
occuring
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occurring
 in the world. They give us
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 with picture
review
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 on a visual
screen
. A Family can have
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 meal and
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while
 watching
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V
. There
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 a range of channels on
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TV
V
 which are
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Games, News, Reality shows,
Darama's
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, geography, cartoons and
relegious
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religious
 channels. We can get
Information
 from
any where
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 we want. Discussing the disadvantages, the
screen
 of
T
.
V
 has some health hazards like, it can be harmful to giving access time to
T
.
V
screen
. Because, our eyes are
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a sensitive
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 part of our body the retina of
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the eye
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 is
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 by these lights of
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screen's
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whether
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weather
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 it's the
screen
 of
mobile
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a mobile
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 phone or
T
.
V
.
To sum up
,
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 would say that technology is going so fast, it's giving our
live's
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 ease and comfort to the
last
 possible level, It's
upto
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up to
 us
in
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how
way
's we use all these things.
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