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The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the recycling rates of four different kinds of materials (
paper
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 and
cardboard
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, glass containers,
alumininium
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aluminium
 cans, and
plastics
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) between 1982 and 2010 in
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one country.
Overall
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, the recycling
rate
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 for
paper
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 and
cardboard
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 was the highest during the whole period,
while
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plastics
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was
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 always the least material to be recycled.
Furthermore
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, we could observe from the graph that the recycling percentages of
paper
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 and
cardboard
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, glass containers, and
plastics
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 fluctuated smoothly,
while
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 the recycling percentage of
alumininium
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aluminium
 cans skyrocketed dramatically. In 1982, around 65% of
paper
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 and
cardboard
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 was recycled, and it reached its peak (80%) in 1994.
Nevertheless
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, the recycling
rate
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 kept dropping from the time and about 70% of it was recycled in 2010.
On the other hand
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, the recycling
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 for glass containers witnessed an opposite trend, which the percentage of it increased after the year of 1994 and reached a peak of 60% in 2010. It could
also
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 be seen from the graph that the recycling
rate
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 for
plastics
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 remained below 10% from 1990 to 2010, and there wasn’t any record before 1990. Oppositely, the recycling amount of
alumininium
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aluminium
 cans in the country shoot up sharply since 1986, from around 5% to 45%. d
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words paper, cardboard, plastics, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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