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The maps below shows university sports courts in 1990 and now.

The maps below shows university sports courts in 1990 and now.
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The given maps depict
the
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information about the alterations which have taken place in University sports courts from 1990 to
present
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the present
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. After analysing the maps, in 1990, a park was
in
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on
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northwest
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the northwest
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 side, nowadays
this
 was removed from there and
basketball
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a basketball
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 court is erected over there.
Additionally
, in the northeast direction, there was
a
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 outdoor
pool
,
whereas
 in present,
outdoor
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the outdoor
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pool
 was demolished and
indoor
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an indoor
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pool
 is built over there. In 1990, near
outdoor
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the outdoor
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pool
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,pool
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 there was a cafe and reception, which
are
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remained
same
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the same
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.
Further
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,Further
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 the maps collate that below
to
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reception there was a changing room but nowadays, it is removed from there and there is
vacant
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a vacant
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 place. In 1990, in
Southwest
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the Southwest
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 direction,
car
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the car
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 park was over there,
whereas
 in present,
tennis
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the tennis
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 court is built
overthere
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over there
 and
car
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the car
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 park is removed from there. Nowadays,
size
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the size
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 of changing room is increased and
located
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is located
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 below to indoor
pool
. In
former
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the former
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year
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years
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, tennis was in the Southeast side, nowadays there is a fitness centre.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pool with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 3 times.
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