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In some countries today, many people decide to have their first child when they are older. What are the reasons? Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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In recent years there is a tendency that many young individuals to choose to have their first
child
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 at a later age.
This
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 may stem from many reasons and from my viewpoint, the advantages do outweigh the drawbacks of
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 trend. The following essay will discuss my point of view.
To begin
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 with, many people want to have their first
child
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 at an older age may
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 a tremendous number of benefits.
Firstly
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, young people need time to develop their careers in order to be financially stable to marry and raise a kid. As an illustration, if a
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 is born into a family with adequate financial conditions, the
child
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 shall be benefited from quality education and healthcare.
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,
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 the reasons for finance and career, young people
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 want to enjoy personal freedom before settling down and having kids.
This
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 trend can be seen in many countries in recent years, which resulted in many
children
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 being born at their parents’ later stage in life. Regarding the pros and cons, the drawbacks of
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 trend may outweigh the benefits in many aspects. Having the first kid at an older age may cause a high chance of birth defects
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 the health conditions that relate to the reproductive health of women at the time.
Children
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 born in
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 conditions may suffer disabilities namely deaf, blindness or some other defects.
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 may cause a number of difficulties in raising the
children
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. Meanwhile, the later the
child
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 is born, the larger the generation gap, which leads to the fact that parents may not understand their
children
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 and vice versa.
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, misunderstandings in many degrees will occur several times in families' life.
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, despite the financial advantages, I suppose the downsides of the tendency are more serious and disadvantageous.
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