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In some countries, more people choose to live by themselves in recent years. Why is this the case? Is it a positive or negative development for society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In a large number of nations, there has been a dramatic increase in the number of
people
 who tend to lead an independent lifestyle.
This
 essay will
initially
 outline the causes of
this
 phenomenon, followed by a presentation of evidence to support my firm conviction that it is an adverse trend. There are primarily two factors behind
people
's tendency to live solitarily.
To begin
 with,
people
 expect more private space. Some are interested in reading books and writing stories,
while
 others have a passion for singing or composing music pieces.
However
, if they live with their family, they will be disturbed frequently, preventing them from enjoying their time.
Furthermore
, some individuals fail to get along well with their family members. Young
people
,
for instance
, have formed the habit of sleeping late and waking up late which is thought of as an extremely unhealthy lifestyle by their parents.
This
 makes the younger generation move out, and those who secure a stable economic source will buy their own property independently. In my opinion,
this
 trend is detrimental to the wider community. The first point to consider is that living a solitary life may lead to a rise in housing prices.
This
 is mainly because the more
people
 choose to live on their own, the more houses are required.
As a result
, demand will exceed supply which entails
people
 spending more on rent and mortgages.
In addition
, society may lack talents who have developed teamwork and social skills. When living alone for a long time,
people
 might rarely communicate with others, becoming isolated and emotionally immature
as well as
 unwilling to cooperate with others. In conclusion, individuals’ pursuit of more privacy and their poor relationship with their families are the two major reasons for them to live independently.
However
, I strongly believe it is not wise to encourage
people
 to live by themselves. For one thing, housing prices will rise considerably; for another, society may suffer from a dearth of
people
 without collaborative abilities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • living alone
  • individualism
  • cultural shift
  • urbanization
  • mobility
  • independence
  • personal freedom
  • economic stability
  • financial independence
  • family structures
  • technological advancements
  • connectivity
  • personal growth
  • self-discovery
  • social connections
  • support networks
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