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In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an ageing population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people. To what extent do the advantages of having an ageing population outweigh the disadvantages?

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In recent years, the average lifespan of
people
 increased in most
of
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the
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countries
 compared to the past. Some
people
 believe it is an
advantage
 because they can increase the wisdom
among
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the
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society
. I believe
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 outweigh
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the advantages
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 because it has a negative impact on
countries
' economies.
People
 who think
this
 situation is an
advantage
 for
population
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the population
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 often argue that aged
people
 can pass their wisdom to young individuals. These
people
 are full of knowledge because they are living for a long time which elderly population can use
this
 information to improve the quality of life
among
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society
.
Although
modern
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 world is quite different from the period they spent most of their life, still they can
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 for fixing the
problems
 inside of
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society
.
For example
, retired individuals can spend their leisure time at schools to teach children valuable manners and ethics. Despite the understandable reason why
people
 consider ageing as an
advantage
, I believe it creates plenty of
problems
to
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economies
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the economies
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 of
countries
. One of these
problems
 is authorities should pay huge amounts of pensions to retired old
people
.
Also
, there are great numbers of aged individuals with various kinds of illnesses in
society
that
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 the pension they receive is not enough for medication.
However
, governments should implement policies for
treatment
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 of these
people
 and they have to spend a great deal of cash.
For example
, in many
countries
, governments pay extra money for aged
people
 with disabilities and mental
problems
. The increasing number of aged
people
 with these
problems
 causes a fall in the amount of funds in
budget
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. In conclusion,
while
 there is
advantage
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the advantage
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 of having more old
people
 in
society
, the economic
problems
 it can cause to governments
is
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 more serious.
This
 is the reason why the advantages of
ageing
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an ageing
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 population do not outweigh its disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ageing population
  • benefits
  • disadvantages
  • advantages
  • experience
  • knowledge
  • contribution
  • economy
  • society
  • healthcare
  • youth employment
  • community
  • intergenerational support
  • volunteerism
  • mentorship
  • increased demand
  • pension costs
  • social welfare systems
  • workforce
  • productivity
  • intergenerational conflict
  • technological adaptability
  • dependency
  • effective
  • skill development
  • employment opportunities
  • intergenerational solidarity
  • communication
  • lifelong learning
  • technological literacy
  • age-friendly
  • social policies
  • infrastructure
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