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It is better to save money than to spend it. How far do you agree with this statement? Is saving more important than spending in today’s world? Give reasons for your answer, and provide ideas and examples from your own experience.

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Introduction
In comparison to the past , the economic level of the world increased now.
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, every citizen has the responsibility to save
money
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 for better future lives.I completely with agree
this
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 statement. In the following paragraphs, I will describe the reasons for my belief that saving is more important than spending in today's world
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 examples.
Body paragraph 1
On the
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 hand, people should not waste their
money
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 on buying unwanted things
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 as expensive cars and dresses etc. By avoiding
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,
one
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 can save
money
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.
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,
one
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 of my uncles is working at the Bharat Heavy Electricals Limited and his salary was more than 1 lakhs per month. Because of his high salary, he bought many luxury items for his house. After retirement, he was diagnosed with cancer and for
treatment
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 he needed a lot of
money
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 but he didn't have enough
money
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 for his medical treatment. At that time, he realised the value of
money
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.
Body paragraph 2
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, parents should teach their children about the value of
money
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 from the initial stage life of children
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 as putting coins in the saving box on a daily basis.
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, my mother taught me when I was studying in school how to save
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 for our future purposes.Actually, I didn't realise the value of
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 but when I grew up I realised. I remember, once upon a time my family faced financial circumstances at that time I helped my parents with my savings.
Conclusion
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, as a penny saved is a penny earned
one
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 should save
money
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 on a monthly or yearly basis to have a fruitful life in the future.

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