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More and more business meetings are taking place online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for this trend?

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In the modern world, it is widely believed that virtual
meetings
 are much better than the traditional way of meeting people. and I will be discussing the advantages and disadvantages in the following paragraph. First of all, the advantages of online
meetings
 are helping
business
 owners to save their operations costs and space and give more flexibility and opportunities to attend multiple
meetings
 from the same place with other people in different countries worldwide at the same time.
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 they can invite as
much
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 as they can without arranging a better space or providing any hospitalities,
therefore
 during and after the pandemic the
business
 culture and needs
has
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 been changed and moved to virtual
meetings
 and as
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 result, they have introduced the working from a home model of
business
 and helped the companies to save more spaces in their offices and reduce the rent cost.
secondly
, the disadvantages come after shifting the traditional
business
 models to online
meetings
 which have impacted
business
 relationships and staff behaviour, and
also
 impacted their personal life. For ,instance most of the workers do not have enough space or a good internet connection at their home to attend
business
meetings
.
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 the productivity of the employees has been reduced to a different level. in conclusion,
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online
business
 meeting serves most companies and suppliers to meet with each other at any time and at any place
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 and help them to arrange more
meetings
 to cover more customers. ,
However
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 the face to face
meetings
 is required to maintain employee relations and connections.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • cost-saving
  • time-saving
  • increased participation
  • flexibility
  • technical difficulties
  • lack of personal connection
  • distractions
  • limited interaction
  • language barriers
  • cultural differences
  • connectivity issues
  • audio/video problems
  • disrupt the flow
  • building rapport
  • non-verbal cues
  • reduced focus
  • spontaneous interaction
  • exchange of ideas
  • collaboration
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