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The graph below shows average cabon dixide emmisions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The graph below shows average cabon dixide emmisions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
#cabon #dixide #emmisions #person #kingdom #sweden
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that
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the average carbon
dicide
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dioxide
decide
emmisions
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emissions
 per person in four countries:
United
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the United
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 Kingdom,Sweden,Italy and
portugal
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Portugal
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 from 1967 to 2007.It is clear from
graph
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the graph
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 that
highest
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the highest
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 average Co2 was in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom at 11 approximately and
lowest
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the lowest
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 amount was in
portugal
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Portugal
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 at 1.
According to
 what is shown ,
portugal
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Portugal
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 increased gradually till
reach
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 5 and
then
 show steady behaviour from 1997 to 2007
while
 in Italy there was
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a sharp
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sharp
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sharply
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increased
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 from 1967 to 1977
then
 increased
gradully
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gradually
 till reach almost 8 in 1997.
In addition
 , Sweden climbed sharply from 1967 to 1977
then
 a significant drop
happend
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happened
happen
 till reach 5 in 2007 . United
kingdom
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Kingdom
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show
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shows
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 slight decrease
throught
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through
throughout
 the period
untill
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until
 reached 9 in 2007.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 4 times.
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