Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?

In recent times, some individuals believe that the government spend too much

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on the

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and

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money

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can be utilized in a different way. I completely agree with

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view and do not support the unnecessary expenditure on the

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.

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with, there are many other places

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money

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can be spent,

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as education, infrastructure, social services etc.

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the most effective way would be to spend on

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.

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is because I believe that

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is one of the most neglected sectors in many parts of the world and the public’s health is suffering because of

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.

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, in the UK, many

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professionals

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as junior doctors, are underpaid despite their hard work and commitment to their job.

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expenditure should be

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a higher priority as opposed to the

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. Now others would argue that spending on the

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allow

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for more creativity and inspire people to think ‘outside the box’.

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may aid in preserving a country’s culture as there is a lot of history connected with the

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. Unfortunately, spending on the

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is of no use if the future students are not healthy and are not able to be as creative as they can. Because of

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, it still would not be a good idea. In conclusion, it is true that the

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should be spent

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, in my

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healthcare

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and should not be spent on the

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. The

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is

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a fascinating area to invest in and

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important across all countries but not

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the detriment of one’s health.