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Some people think that robots are very important to human’s future development, while others think they are dangerous and have negative effects on society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #robots #human’s #future #development #effects #society
Robots
,
one
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 of the modern technologies that
has
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 been the topic of discussion by many
people
 lately. One of the topics for the discussion is the impact
robots
 will have on society. The following essay will discuss the pros and cons
as well as
 my point of view. On
one
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 hand,
robots
 have several benefits. As an example,
robots
 can help
human
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work
 and could reduce
the productions expense
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the expense of the production
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.
As a result
, it can increase
the
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job effectiveness and help massive productions. Many others,
however
, are opposed and believed that
robots
 are dangerous and have negative effects on society.
For example
, if the amount of company
who
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 used
robots
 as
substitute
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to
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 human
work
 are massive, it can increase the number of unemployed
people
.
As a result
, it can increase the chance of
another casualties
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,
such
 as criminality because of the large number of unemployed
people
. Not only that, before using
robot
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robots
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 as an option to help someone
work
, they should take a consideration whether their
work
suitable
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is suitable
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 for using
robots
 or not, because not all
work
 is suitable
using
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robots
. As an example, for several arts
industry
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 that need detailed
work
. In conclusion,
while
 the benefits of
robots
, particularly
the
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 effectiveness and
saves
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 production expenses,
robots
 can be a tool to help
people
 do their
work
.
However
, there are some negative impacts too,
such
 as the increased number of criminality cases and not too detailed
work
.
Nevertheless
, in my opinion, as long as we use it wisely, we could prevent and lessen the negative impact of using
robots
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Artificial intelligence
  • Automation
  • Technological advancements
  • Workforce displacement
  • Ethical considerations
  • Innovation
  • Labor market
  • Safety protocols
  • Machine learning
  • Human-robot interaction
  • Economic impact
  • Job creation
  • Cybersecurity
  • Autonomous
  • Precision
  • Dependency
  • Regulation
  • Risk assessment
  • Adaptation
  • Unemployment
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