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The maps below show the layouts of nature Museum between 2010 and 2013.

The maps below show the layouts of nature Museum between 2010 and 2013.
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The given map presents the layout of the
museum
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 named nature
museum
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 from the duration of 2010 and 2013. The diagram shows that in the
year
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 2010, the entry gate open up in the lobby that had a ticket desk available and a pathway to
ocean
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 hall.
Moreover
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, the
museum
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also
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 contains
dinasaurs
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dinosaurs
 and mammals. The exterior of
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museum
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the museum
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 has a garden
at
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on
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 its left
sides
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side
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 having trees. In
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year
Change the article
the year
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 2013, the
infrastructue
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infrastructure
 of
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museum
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the museum
a museum
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 contains a ticket desk inside
lobby
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the lobby
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. It
further
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 had
the
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apply
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sections for displaying the ice age and the insects for
display
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. It
also
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 had a section for showcasing
the
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dinasaurs
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dinosaurs
, mammals, and a
display
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 for human origins.
Additionally
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, the
museum
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 had
the
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a
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 shop and cafe. In 2013, the
museum
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 was upgraded and the garden in the previous architecture of 2010 was replaced. The
area
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area
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had been redesigned with walls.
This
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area
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 was used for providing the facility of
shop
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a shop
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 and cafe.
However
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, there were a few more changes made regarding the
display
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. The showcase
area
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 for mammals was shifted from the left to
right
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the right
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 side. The
iceage
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ice age
 portion was added
in
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to
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 the layout of
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museum
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the museum
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. The
museum
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also
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 adds up human
orgins
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origins
organs
 for the
display
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. In conclusion, the map provides
,
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 the design of nature
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museum
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museums
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 in the
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year
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years
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 2010 and 2013. The map shows the difference between the changes that were made in
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year
Change the article
the year
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 2013.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum, year, display, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "display" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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