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Nowdays many students have the opportunity to study some or all of their course in a foreign country. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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In
this
 modern era, the world become widened.So,
Students
 have many opportunities to
study
 in their home
country
 or in foreign countries but there are some pros and cons to
this
 matter.Which are written in the following paragraphs.
To begin
 with,There are some disadvantages to studying in foreign lands.First and foremost the reason is money.The expense of
study
 is very high in the out of
country
.
Hence
, middle-class families do not afford that much of an amount
due to
 their having to borrow money
as well as
 they have to take big loans for their studies.
Furthermore
,
students
 have to do part-time jobs because the cost of their housing and grocery are very high so
this
 lid to them doing the extra jobs.So, they do not have time for their
study
 and that causes anxiety in the
students
.
For example
,
Country
 like Canada and The USA
students
 do labour jobs because the college fees and the rent of houses are too much.
Therefore
, they do not have any other option.
Nevertheless
, there are some other sides to
this
 view.
Students
 want to
study
 abroad because they know that after graduation they have numerous amount of opportunities in their field job.
Moreover
, We all know that in a foreign
country
, in each and every field people get a good job and earn ample amounts of money. Fields like computers have huge demand in foreign countries.
For instance
,
Students
 get the opportunity to work in big companies like Google, Apple and Amazon and reaching on a good post.
In addition
, the other reason is that they get freedom
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overseas. They do not have to follow social rules and regulations. They can live without any burden on society.
Thus
,
this
 is the chief reason that people want to live in a foreign
country
.
To sum up
, There are some negative points to studying in the other
country
 but
on the other hand
,they get a good future and freedom in a foreign land
as well as
 they secure their career
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Thus
, the advantages overweight the disadvantages.
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