The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
The diagram illustrates several steps of how the production of
sugar
from sugar
cane is carried out in the factory.
It is clear that
there are 7 main stages in this
process, starting with plants being grown in 17-18 months and ending with the resulting product as the natural sweetener.
As can be seen, during the first stage, sugar
cane is cultivated in crops for more than a year and harvested by hand or using a cutting machine. Next,
these plants are brought to a crushing engine in order to be crushed to get the juice, and the waste is thrown away.
Once the liquid is collected, it undergoes a purifying process with the use of a limestone filter to remove all the left dirt before being heated so that the water is evaporated, therefore
the juice becomes syrup. Subsequently
, the syrup is taken to a centrifuge to separate sugar
crystals. Finally
, those are dried and cooled to create fine products for various uses.Submitted by danphamngocha on
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