The chart below shows waste collection by a recycling centre from 2011 to 2015
The line graph outlines the figure for weekly
patients
who come to the hospital to
check-ups for 4 clinics (Change preposition
for
birth
control
, eye
, diabetes
and dental) over a period
of 7 years.
Overall
, it can be seen that patients
who Correct article usage
the patients
visiting
Wrong verb form
visited
to
Remove the preposition
apply
eye
, Add an article
the eye
diabetes
, dental
rose from 2010 to 2016 Correct word choice
and dental
while
this
figure for birth
control
patients
fell. At the start of the period
, the clinic for birth
control
received the highest data and the
Correct article usage
apply
diabetes
is the lowest.
Patients
who go to check-ups eye
and Change preposition
for eye
birth
control
changed rapidly.Eye
patients
increased quickly from 130 to 350. Birth
control
patients
between 2010 and 2012 is an upward trend from 240 to 280. In 2014, birth
control
patients
declined to 180 and in 2016 returned to the original level like
2010. Change preposition
in
Patients
who came to check up diabetes
and dental changed ceaselessly. In 2010, Change preposition
for diabetes
patients
who Correct article usage
the patients
visiting
Wrong verb form
visit
diabetes
and dental is
the lowest in the line graph (between 50-100). In the next Correct subject-verb agreement
are
period
between 2010 to 2012, diabetic patients
climbed to 90 and dental patients
go down to 60 .From 2012 to 2014, the dental
Correct quantifier usage
number of dental
patients
remained the same as 2010
Change preposition
in 2010
while
the diabetic
Correct quantifier usage
number of diabetic
patients
jumped from 60 to 130.In the last
period
, both of its
changed mildly. The Correct pronoun usage
them
diabetic
Correct quantifier usage
number of diabetic
patients
increased from 90 to 180 and dental patients
jumped from 130 to 135.Submitted by Soobinsj13
on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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