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Main Topic: Some people think that schools are no longer necessary because children can get so much information available through the Internet while others believe that nothing can replace physical classrooms with direct guidance from teachers.Discuss both views( and give your own opinion).

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Whilst many people consider advanced technology studying without the need for school is beneficial, I believe learning from physical classrooms will help
children
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 more through guidance from their teachers knowing where they lack specifically. On the one hand,
Information
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 is available easily from various sources despite that, many individuals lack the credibility of that
information
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.
Internet
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 indeed has helped many
children
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 to ace up their wisdom by providing advanced and complex
information
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 into simple understanding.
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, learning from the
internet
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 will isolate the kids from socializing and will not obtain skills for communication.
Such
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 the report on the rapid growth of the
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,
Children
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 avoid going out because they are getting entertained through online games and if
schools
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 are
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 replaced by
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information
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,
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 it would lead to unknown problems.
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, School helps young minds to maintain discipline and to socialize with new
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.
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, the teacher's presence and guidance benefit the
children
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 to surmount their weaknesses and build their capability where they are strong.
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 have extra-curricular activities which help students to identify their hobbies and hidden talents which later in the coming years are
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 known as professional artists. Replacing
schools
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 will keep
children
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 away from the real-life world experience and make them naive.
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, Evolving in advanced technology will help young kids to level up their knowledge but,
schools
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 will help them to understand the real world through persistent guidance and knowledge from teachers and will unveil their hidden talents as well which the
internet
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 will surely lack.
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, Physical classrooms will always be beneficial to
children
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.
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