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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 1010 and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 1010 and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The line chart illustrates how many tourists visit a special Caribbean
Island
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 from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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, It can be seen that over the entire period, the figure for visitors with accommodation on both
cruise
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 ships and the
Island
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 experience an upward trend. In
this
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 period, the total of tourists visiting increased rapidly by 2.5
Million
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 ( from 1
million
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 to 3.5
million
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). In fact, In 2010, the figure for visitors staying on
cruise
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 ships stood at 0.25
Million
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,
whereas
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 that of the
Island
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 was 3 times that. From
this
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 year to 2017, both of them saw a fluctuating rise of 1.75 and 1
million
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, respectively. To be more specific, between 2010 and 2011 the number of visitors on
cruise
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 ships didn't change,
while
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 that of the
Island
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 went up by 0.5
million
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, after which
cruise
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 ship users declined and reach 0.25
million
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 in 2012.
This
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 population increase moderately over the next period,
While
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 the
island
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 users experienced a fall from 1.5 to 1.25 between 2015 and 2016 but returned to 1.5 again in 2017.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, cruise, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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