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With the increased global demand in oil and gas, undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to access more resources. To what extent do you agree?

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In the modern era, there is a huge debate about the demand for
oil
 and
gas
 is increasing day by day.
However
, the government wants to give access to companies for finding more resources from undiscovered areas. A large group of people think in its favour.
While
 others have the opposite opinion. The upcoming paragraphs will shed light on my personal opinion with a suitable example. I agree with the statement nowadays,
oil
 and
gas
 are demanding and there are not enough resources to
fulfil
 the requirements in the future. There are numerous reasons why I am in favour of it. The most important reason is the consumption of
oil
 and
gas
 at the top of the list.
In other words
, all over the world
oil
 and
gas
 is the main thing that uses globally.
Moreover
, to
fulfil
 future requirements the government should be allowed to open undiscovered areas for searching new resources of
oil
 and
gas
. It means that with the help of new discoveries, people
fulfil
 their needs in the future. I would like to give a reason to explain my perspective.
Further
, everything depends on
oil
 and
gas
 to justify my perception, I would like to give an example of a serve which use conducted by Sydney University in 2014. The survey revealed the findings that
oil
 and
gas
 are directly proportional to
the
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inflation.
On the contrary
, some people oppose the above statement for several reasons, because they believe that
gas
 and
oil
 should be replaced with new technologies.
In addition
, nowadays, many companies are making electric cars to reduce the consumption of
oil
 and
gas
. Tesla is the biggest company to manufacture electric cars.
Furthermore
, solar panels have
also
introduced
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 in the world to
fulfil
 the requirements in lieu of
oil
 and
gas
. To recapitulate,
according to
 the arguments aforementioned above. One can reach the conclusion that the benefits of the topic are indeed too great to ignore.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global demand
  • finite resources
  • energy consumption
  • exploiting
  • untouched ecosystems
  • carbon emissions
  • climate change
  • renewable energy
  • sustainable energy solutions
  • geopolitical consequences
  • territorial disputes
  • dependency
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