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of
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. In my opinion, there are several reasons why indiscipline behaviour
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among
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measures to tackle
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more
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,
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violence
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classrooms
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children
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the number of
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in Saudi
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teachers
teach over 50
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teachers
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.
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social
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that, children watch violent
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by the government to
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this
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education sector in order to build more
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classrooms
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violent
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suffer from unacceptable behaviour among
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school
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,
violent
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images
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social
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however
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solutions to cope with
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  • Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • parental guidance
  • discipline
  • moral guidance
  • social media
  • detrimental
  • bullying
  • peer pressure
  • overcrowded
  • disengagement
  • disruptive behavior
  • behavioral policies
  • code of conduct
  • parental involvement
  • social and emotional learning (SEL)
  • empathy
  • responsible decisions
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