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Is freedom of speech vital in free society? Agree or disagree

#freedom #speech #society
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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is
freedom
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 of
speech
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 vital in society. Now
people
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 are beginning to realize that in our world we should have more
freedom
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. Personally, I tend to think that because we
are
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live in modern times.
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,it is well known that our Kazakh ancestors fight for their lives for
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 of
speech
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.It was
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historically
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 moment. One of the main
reason
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 behind
that is
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 every person,every nation everyone who lives deserves
for
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free
speech
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.
Usually
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 media show that it is incredibly important to protect human rights.
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 in 1991 in Kazakhstan were a lot of meetings.
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 their aim was
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 of
speech
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.
On the other hand
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, it can be argued that if someone
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 not have
a
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freedom
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,
this
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 is at least not fair,
therefore
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 we must save our rights.
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Otherwise
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 we lose our rights freedoms and choices. Take
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Russia
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 Federation and
USA
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the USA
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. We will see
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 difference in
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. My friend Muhammed who was live in Kazakhstan,Russia and
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 in
USA
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the USA
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 says that
main
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 problem of
people
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 is that,
we
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 are being so afraid and shy, when we talk about any problems in
country
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,meanwhile other countries nations are brave,
for
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example
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i
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 think that french
people
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 realized their
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.In
history
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 we know that
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 is
vital
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a vital
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 element for
live
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, just because every person
able
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 to speak
free
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. From my point of
view
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 the government should give support and promote to develop
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 of
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. In conclusion,taking everything mentioned into account in our final analysis we can say that all
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people
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 may have
freedom
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 of
speech
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 for their personal preferences and opinions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Freedom of speech
  • Democratic society
  • Marketplace of ideas
  • Dissenting opinions
  • Social progress
  • Innovation
  • Government accountability
  • Transparency
  • Good governance
  • Cultural development
  • Personal freedom
  • Self-realization
  • Public debate
  • Human rights
  • Liberties
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