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Is freedom of speech vital in free society? Agree or disagree

#freedom #speech #society
One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is
freedom
 of
speech
 vital in society. Now
people
 are beginning to realize that in our world we should have more
freedom
. Personally, I tend to think that because we
are
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live in modern times.
Firstly
,it is well known that our Kazakh ancestors fight for their lives for
freedom
 of
speech
.It was
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 moment. One of the main
reason
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 behind
that is
 every person,every nation everyone who lives deserves
for
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free
speech
.
Usually
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 media show that it is incredibly important to protect human rights.
For example
 in 1991 in Kazakhstan were a lot of meetings.
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 their aim was
freedom
 of
speech
.
On the other hand
, it can be argued that if someone
do
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 not have
a
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freedom
,
this
 is at least not fair,
therefore
 we must save our rights.
Otherwise
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 we lose our rights freedoms and choices. Take
for example
Russia
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 Federation and
USA
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the USA
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. We will see
significant
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 difference in
speech
. My friend Muhammed who was live in Kazakhstan,Russia and
finally
 in
USA
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 says that
main
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 problem of
people
 is that,
we
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 are being so afraid and shy, when we talk about any problems in
country
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,meanwhile other countries nations are brave,
for
example
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i
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 think that french
people
 realized their
freedom
.In
history
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 we know that
freedom
 is
vital
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 element for
live
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, just because every person
able
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 to speak
free
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. From my point of
view
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 the government should give support and promote to develop
freedom
 of
speech
. In conclusion,taking everything mentioned into account in our final analysis we can say that all
of
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people
 may have
freedom
 of
speech
 for their personal preferences and opinions.
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