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Some people believe that children should be banned from using their phones during the school day. Others believe that children should be allowed to use their phones. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #children #phones #school
As children are using that have both sides advantages
as well as
 disadvantages.
According to
, me using a
phone
 have more advantage compared to disadvantage. My viewpoint and opinion are discussed below.
Firstly
, there are so
much
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 benefits
in
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to
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 using a
phone
such
 as it
give
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 information, data, and even
knowleghe
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knowledge
 about
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the study
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study
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studying
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. A student can easily
study
 from the
phone
 with the help
by
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of
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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.
For example
, kids living in
india
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India
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 can
study
 from
a
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an
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 other country.
Due to
 a
phone
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,phone
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 it
have
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 become easy to
a
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apply
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study
about
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new and different things.
Thus
, it
good
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 for
a
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apply
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kids to
use
 mobile.
Hence
,
a children
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children
a child
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 should
use
 phones during
the a
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apply
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school days.
Secondly
, there
are
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is
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 even some side
effect
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effects
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such
 as using
for
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apply
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a
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apply
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social media and
a
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apply
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watching
a
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apply
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movies and
a
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apply
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songs and much more. Many a child spend
there
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their
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 many for the fun parts
compare
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compared
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 to
a
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apply
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study
meterials
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materials
.
For example
, using
mobil
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mobile
 for fun
more
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is more
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 other than
study
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studying
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.
Thirdly
,
a children
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children
a child
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this
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apply
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should be
ancourage
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encouraged
encourage
 to
do
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apply
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study
from
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on
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the
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apply
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mobiles
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mobile
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. As it
have
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has
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 both sides but still a students should
use
a
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the
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internet
. A school should allow to
use
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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. A school can get so
much
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many
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 benefits if kids
is
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are
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 using mobile. In conclusion, as my viewpoint is discussed in the above information.
However
, mobile has some disadvantages but as it has more advantages so the child should keep using phones and learn new things from the
Internet
 and help others and develop new things. In my opinion, a child should
use
 a mobile.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Distraction
  • Cyberbullying
  • Concentration
  • Emergency communication
  • Digital literacy
  • Educational resources
  • Social development
  • Self-regulation
  • Enforcement
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Technology access
  • Learning apps
  • Screen time
  • Peer interaction
  • School policy
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