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Some students take a gap year after graduating high school to work and/or travel. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is a common belief that having a
gap
year
 before entering the university has negative effects on
students
 who just graduated from high school.
However
, there is a more persuasive argument that
this
 will positively affect
students
. On the
one
 hand, taking
one
year
 break before starting college life will lower
students
’ academic performance than others.
Students
 who take a
gap
year
 would forget about how to study
such
 as note-taking or writing a logical essay.
This
 would widen the educational
gap
 between other
students
 who directly enter college without having a break.
For example
, recent statistics show that more than half of
students
 who have a
gap
year
 tend to have low grades and struggle with their assignments and studying.
Nevertheless
.
By taking
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one
year
 off between graduating
school
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from school
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 and going to college would positively affect
students
 in various ways. For
one
, through working,
students
 could gain job experiences which could not achieve through courses and classes in universities.
This
 can help
students
 to be employed without difficulties after
graduate
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 from the university since they have rich experiences which make them adapt easily to work.
Moreover
,
students
 can widen their thoughts and view by travelling.
For instance
, as they are able to experience different cultures and traditions in other countries, they might find out their new advantages or hobbies that may help them to decide their future.
To sum up
,
while
 it is apparent that having a
gap
year
 might make
students
’ grades to fall, in my opinion, it is undeniable that
his
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 my has positive effects since they can achieve plentiful experiences and widen their view.
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