Some people say that advetising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things . others people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it . discuss both the views and give your opinion?

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some argue that it is quite successful with advertisement as it promotes buyers into spending more money

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other opinions explain that people are losing their attention

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commodities. I will discuss both statements as I give my personal thinking.

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, behind an appealing ad, there is always creativity and innovation.

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is possible because there is a team in each company whose only task is to think about how to introduce the products in the changing society. Specifically,

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group is referred to as the marketing department which always discusses how to attract individuals.

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, Coca-Cola has been very good at convincing people to continue purchasing their original products after a hundred years. Recently Christmas TV commercials showed that you can buy a can with your name, making it attractive to individuals to purchase it.

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, it is true that sometimes, over the years, the adverts of some products have not changed and

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repetitive and stale.

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, advertising shows up at the wrong moment and makes people annoyed.

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, in Spain when you are watching a movie or a series on television, there are breaks for adverts.

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situation can make the public end up changing the way they feel about the product because it interrupts the movie or series. In conclusion, I consider that advertising is constantly improving and new strategies are increasing. We are around advertisements unconsciously.

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, there is some advertisement on TV that are not interactive with the public.

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task response

Provide a clearer opinion on the effectiveness of advertising in persuading people to buy things. Make sure to clearly state whether you believe it is successful or not and support your opinion with specific examples.

coherence cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph is logically linked to the next, and that there is a clear progression of ideas throughout the essay. Consider using linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more effectively.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

252 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

persuade
promote
attract
influence
impact
consumerism
commercialism
market
product
brand
endorsement
manipulative
saturated
overwhelmed
repetitive
distracting
irrelevant
exaggerated
misleading
desensitized

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