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2020-01-11: Task 1 You visited a town last month and told your friend that you would like to meet. However you could not make it. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, you should: •express your apology •why you could not meet •making arrangement to meet him.

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Dear Kathy, How are you doing? I'
m
 really sorry that I was not able to meet you on the 27th of
last
 month at Infocity in Bangalore. As I told you, I visited Infocity for a business meeting which was expected to finish at 1 p.
m
.
However
, the meeting got extended by 1 hour and my train was at 3 p.
m
.
Not to mention
, you already know the traffic congestion in Bangalore. I headed to the railway station in a hurry and in the midst of the chaos, I could not even get time to give a call to you. But don't worry about it. I've already booked the ticket for my next travel to Bangalore and I'
m
 coming on the 20th of
this
 month. I'
m
 planning to stay in your house on that day and will return only on the 21st. We'll definitely have fun and do some shopping at Pheonix Mall. Hope to see you soon! With love, Gloria
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coherence cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, consider using a few more linking words or phrases to connect your ideas more smoothly. For example, phrases like 'On the other hand,' or 'Furthermore,' can help to guide the reader through your narrative.
task achievement
Your tone is quite friendly and fits the context well. Just make sure to maintain a balance between formality and friendliness, as this affects how professional the letter feels.
task achievement
Your letter includes all necessary points, making it a complete response to the task. Well done!
coherence cohesion
The logical structure of your paragraphs is very clear, making it easy to follow your explanation.
task achievement
You have used a warm and friendly tone, which is very suitable for a letter to a friend.
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