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Some people think that public transport should be funded by the government so that it can be free to the people who use it. Do you agree or disagree?

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 with the past, the public transport system is more developed. It is argued that government should act as
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 so residents can use free public vehicles. I opine that authorities do not need to utilize
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 for
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 type of public spending. On the one hand, it is understandable why many people believe that complimentary transport is the best way for everyone since many fates are witnessed in wretched conditions. Indeed, many penniless inhabitants can not afford mass transit in daily commuting and
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, they decide to have personal vehicles so it raises traffic jams and devastated infrastructure when it cannot respond to the huge amount of cars and motorbikes on the roads. It
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 generates a large
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 of emissions in the atmosphere.
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 and other species can be influenced by a contaminated environment,
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, lots of residents want governments' support for
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the expenditure
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 of public
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 to reduce disadvantages.
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, I believe that authorities should require consumers a certain amount of money to hold a stable economy and not interfere
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 other social obstacles.
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, some countries
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cannot pay for
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due to
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 being undeveloped enough; thence, the standard of their inhabitants’ life do not safeguard like other wealthy nations
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 as the USA and UK.
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, to ensure
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 climate, they do not have the ability to fund all these vehicles.
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, they should command a tiny figure to operate
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, pay for human resources and balance other pressing public problems that are still inadequate in use
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 as hospitals,
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insurance
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 and
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 for unemployees rather than mass
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.
For
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this
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 reason, people need to spend a little salary to minimize these issues. In conclusion, I suppose that governments can support the price of public
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, they should still collect money from citizens to execute the system before expecting it to be free.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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