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The action of capital abuse has been a hotly debated topic amongst individuals. In my opinion, life imprisonment is more suited
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 and hit the right word limit. Conspicuously, prisoners can be made use of during their imprisonment.
This
 is because governments can involve prisoners in social work and undertake multiple projects that way.
Furthermore
, if we give them a chance, it is still a better option.
For example
, it is seen in many jails that when prisoners are given a chance, they improve their attitudes and become better citizens when they step out.
On the other hand
, some people presume that capital punishment is more sound.
Nonetheless
, capital punishment is a very uneducated way to deal with the problem. One clear reason is that these kinds of punishments happened in ancient times. If repeating the same barbaric behaviours again, it will show a lack of growth.
Moreover
, it is basically killing people.
For instance
, we lose thousands of fellow human lives every year, which is very unethical. Based on the above discussion, I still stand by my stance.
That is
, capital punishment is not an effective way because it hurts humanity.
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