Nowadays, it is getting difficult for people to enjoy their lives in cities. Why do you think this is? What can the government do to make life in cities more enjoyable?
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life
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,life
people
choose cities
to live in,
because there are a Remove the comma
apply
lot
of different opportunities to do a graduation degree, earn money, have a beautiful life
and travel a lot
. I suppose that our life
in big cities
is always connected with a high level of stress
, depression, anxiety etc. So why is it happened
?
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happening
Firstly
, working at big companies people
have a lot
of responsibilities, they should be always a
highly competitive employeeCorrect article usage
apply
,
because there are a Remove the comma
apply
lot
of another candidates
, who wants to get Replace the adjective
another candidate
other candidates
this
position. In other words
, a
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apply
stress
from work has a crucial influence in
our mental health. Change preposition
on
Secondly
, a large number of cities
have a considerable level of different noises, including cars, music and other loud sounds in cities
. Conseqently
, a permanent noise is able to result in problems with Correct your spelling
Consequently
psychological
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a psychological
condition
. Fix the agreement mistake
conditions
Thus
, it is getting hard to enjoy our life
in these places.
So, what should do
government to reduce these issues? At Correct article usage
the do
first,
I believe that creating more parks, places
with Correct word choice
and places
relaxing
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the relaxing
a relaxing
atmosphere
is essential for Fix the agreement mistake
atmospheres
people
's mental health, because people
have an opportunity to be calm, listen
nature sounds and relax. Add the preposition
tolisten
However
, an employees
should have Correct the article-noun agreement
employees
an employee
a
free time to visit these places, so comfortable working conditions are essential for every Correct article usage
apply
individuals
. Change to a singular noun
individual
In other words
, if a person has a
leisure time to relax and distress from work, he has Correct article usage
apply
a
less Remove the article
apply
stress
in his life
.
To conclude
, I want to say that sometimes living in a big city is harmful for
your mental health Change the preposition
to
due to
a
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apply
stress
. However
, having a smart approach for
reducing Change preposition
to
this
factor could result in Correct article usage
the plesure
plesure
of your Correct your spelling
pleasure
life
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