It is more important for school children to learn local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

History

is often a compulsory subject in education in the

world

because of

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necessary for

both

individuals

and

societies

. It is argued that students should focus on learning the

history

of their own

countries

and lower their concentration on the

history

of other

societies

. In my opinion,

both

of which should be studied equally and carefully. It is true that local

history

is an indispensable discipline in education. On

individual

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level, those who acquire knowledge about their own country’s

history

can be aware of their roots and acquire insights into their cultures.

This

would bring benefits to the

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and behaviour of

individuals

with their comparison and even

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individuals

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personality traits which

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ảesuitable

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suitable

for their

societies

. On

societal

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a societal

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level, learning more about historic events that took place in a country can foster

patriotism

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of its residents.

Consequently

, the population would become loyal to their country and try to contribute to the country’s development, meaning a thriving and civilized society.

However

,

world

history

also

should be focused on owing to its importance to the development of

both

countries

and their residents.

This

is because, thanks to learning the

history

of other

societies

in the

world

, students can have

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general thinking about other

country’s

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countries’

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history

and culture, leading to respect for other nations.

Besides

, having an insight into cultures can

also

encourage the integration among

countries

and

this

is a great way to deal with racism which is occurring in some parts of the

world

, resulting in a peaceful and civilized

world

. In conclusion, I believe that

both

local and

world

history

are

both

equally important for not only

individuals

and

countries

but

also

the

world

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and

thus

both

of

which

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should be learned carefully.