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Increasing travels between countries enable people to learn about different cultures, or to increase tension between people from different countries? discuss both views.

Some
people
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 believe that
traveling
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 around the
countries
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 could improve their knowledge and understanding
about
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of
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 certain cultures.
However
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, some
people
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 think that it can increase
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 conflict between
countries
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.
This
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 essay will elucidate both views in the forthcoming paragraphs.
To begin
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 with, some
people
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traveling
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travel
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 to another
country
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 as their therapeutic.
In addition
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, It
also
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 teaches us about the difference, cultures and traditions.
For instance
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, Japan is well-known for
their
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its
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 discipline,
highly-educated
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 and modern thinking, the
country
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 itself has a lot of temples and castles with many tourist attractions.
Therefore
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, many
people
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 from around the world want to visit
this
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country
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 to gain knowledge of the
people
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 and enjoy sightseeing
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 city
center
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centre
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. On the flip side, not many
countries
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 are welcoming
tourists
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 and sometimes many
tourists
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 often faced a number of issues
while
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 visiting certain
countries
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. As an illustration, North Korea is quite
controversial
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 company and closed
to
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apply
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world-wide
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worldwide
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.
Moreover
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, not many
tourists
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 want to choose
this
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country
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 as their holiday destination.
In addition
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, many strict rules that you have to
obeyed
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 when visiting
this
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country
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.
As a result
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,
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 tourism can boost
economy
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the economy
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 of a nation,
but
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we must
aware
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be aware
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 to avoid unwanted circumstances. In conclusion, Despite having a lot of
tourists
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to visit
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visiting
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 a
country
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 can increase their economy significantly and gain knowledge of different
country
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’s food and tradition, but
no
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not
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 for all
countries
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, because some of them might have strict rules and can
leads
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 to critical consequences when you break the rules.
Therefore
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, travelling is beneficial to both the visitors
as well as
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 the foreign nation, care must be taken by both to ensure a wonderful experience.

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