Governments give a lot of support to artists , even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been used elsewhere. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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ARTISTS OFTEN RECEIVE A LOT OF MONETARY BENEFITS FROM THE GOVERNMENT.A CERTAIN

SECTON

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OF SOCIETY IS IN FAVOUR OF IT,

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OTHERS ARENT.OTHER INDIVIDUALS THINK THAT THE MONEY CAN BE USED FOR BETTER CONCERNS. I SHARE MY OPINION WITH THE FACT THAT MONEY SHOULD BE USED FOR OTHER IMPORTANT ASPECTS. ARTISTS IN MY COUNTRY, ENJOY MUCH IMPORTANCE AS THEY ARE CONSIDERED AS A SOURCE OF TOURISM APART FROM SPORTS AND FAMOUS CUISINE. ARTISTIC PAINTINGS OF FAMOUS PAINTERS

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AS M.F. HUSSAIN AND LEONARDI DI VINCI BOOST THE ECONOMIC VALUE OF THE COUNTRY BY BRINGING IN LOCALS

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OTHER NATIONS.

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, A FRIEND OF MINE HAD TRAVELLED FROM INDIA TO ITALY TO ADMIRE THE PAINTINGS AND SCULPTURES IN THE ART MUSEUM. A STUDY CONDUCTED AT

NATIONAL

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UNIVERSITY OF ARTS,ITALY REVEALED SOME AMAZING FACTS ABOUT HOW ARTS HAD HELPED TO

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THEIR COUNTRY’S PER

APITAL

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CAPITAL

INCOME

AS WELL AS

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POULARITY

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POPULARITY

AMONG OTHER COUNTRIES.

ON THE CONTRARY

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, I FIRMLY BELIEVE THAT THESE FUNDS SHALL BE UTILIZED IN A PROPER MANNER AND SHOULD HELP IN PROVIDING BETTER AMENITIES

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ACCESS TO CLEAN DRINKING WATER,BETTER INFRASTRUCTURE AND TRANSPORTATION FACILITIES.THESE WILL HELP THE CITIZENS TO LEAD A BETTER QUALITY OF LIFESTYLE.

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TO THAT, THE GOVERNMENT CAN

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USE THESE FUNDS TO DONATE TO THE NEEDY PEOPLE A SMALL AMOUNT FOR THEIR DAY-TO-DAY EXPENSES, PROVIDE HOUSING FACILITIES AND REDUCTION IN MEDICAL NEEDS

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, I SUGGEST THAT

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ART ATTRACTS MAJOR TOURISM AND PRIDE TO A COUNTRY, IT SHOULD NOT BE FORGOTTEN THAT THE RIGHT TO HEALTHY LIFE IS

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OTHER REQUIREMENTS.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 5.0

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Task Achievement: 8.0

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