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The graph below shows the popularity of different methods of communication in 2011 in the UK.

The graph below shows the popularity of different methods of communication in 2011 in the UK.
The given line graph illustrates the percentages of how different
age
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 groups (16 to over 65) communicated with others using mobile
phones
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, landlines,
internet
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, or post in the UK in 2011.
Overall
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, the older the British people, the less interested they were in communication through mobile
phones
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 and the
Internet
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.
However
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, their interest in landlines and posts grew with their
age
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. As can be seen, almost all British people aged 16-24 used mobile
phones
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 and the
Internet
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 in 2011. Their popularity decreased steadily in
age
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 categories 25-54; above 75% of UK citizens with 45-54 years of
age
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 communicated with
such
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 methods. In the next group,
this
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 decline becomes greater by about 20 and 25% for mobile
phones
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 and the
Internet
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, respectively.
On the contrary
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, the youngest group were less interested in a post (85%) and landline (70%) than the other 2 methods. These numbers increased gradually as the range
age
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 was older in 2011. In the group over 65, nearly 100% of them contacted others through posting or calling on the phone.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, phones, internet with synonyms.
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